There i was standing on top of a rock aiming my arrow at unichels which is a unicorn mixed with a little girl that is very much a evil henchman who we think might be me biggest arch enemy who i had many battles with the one the only Mr Jackman who was a very powerful villain back in the 1980’s when he was a lot younger than what he is right, i'm watching over the valley where me and my squad think he’s hiding we put a tracker on him last time we fort against each other he had been all around the world the past year so we hope the tracker is still on him because we have been following him and his henchman around for a year but there's been no sign of him with his henchman.
Hi Kyvana you have written an interesting snippet of a story. It would be great to hear the rest of your story and maybe you could use more punctuation marks e.g Capital letters, Full stops etc. Ka pai Kyvana:).
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